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诗璨 2008-8-7 22:43

乡村的夏夜

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小杰制作 2008-8-8 07:59

我还以为是原创内,有才华!:-67

热带雨林 2008-8-15 09:28

[quote]原帖由 <I>诗璨</I> 于 2008-8-7 22:43 发表 <A href="http://www.langxi.org/redirect.php?goto=findpost&amp;pid=351341&amp;ptid=48261" target=_blank><IMG onclick=zoom(this) alt="" src="http://www.langxi.org/images/common/back.gif" onload="attachimg(this, 'load')" border=0></A> 乡村的夏夜 &nbsp; 我借助星月的余辉踱步在乡村的夏夜田风清凉我的心境稻香抖擞我的精神 &nbsp; 那青黛的远山默然如同老人胡子里的故事闪烁着我儿时的天真 &nbsp; 依山的松林挥舞着墨色的丝巾 ... [/quote] 此诗，我咏读再三。主要特点，情景交融，虚实结合，想象丰富。既给人以炎夏的清凉之感，又给人以振奋之气。末尾志向远大，篇章点题，是此诗的玩味之点，不可轻轻放过。

易水 2008-8-15 15:45

依然是沿袭白话诗歌最初风气的表现力，可惜，如今是2008了。LZ喜欢诗歌的话，不妨先去读些散文，沉淀了文学意象的解读能力，再来写诗，自然不同。

诗璨 2008-8-31 22:05

谢谢楼上谬赞。其实“文章本天成，妙手偶得之”，人愈能心境淡泊，愈有出好作品的机会。只是我对于“淡泊”两个字，拿是拿的起，放却放不下。才上眉头，却下心头。重复一个字，难、难、难，难于上青天。

一条板凳 2008-9-1 22:38

诗有点幼稚,但不是楼主的错(表达自己真实的意思,是没有错的.但是诗一出来,就属于受众,而不是楼主自己了).4楼的点评很到位.

诗璨 2008-9-2 14:44

“横看成岭侧为峰，远近高低各不同”。感谢所有的批评与鼓励，对我来说，都是一笔莫大的财富，终身受用。我相信，时间会检验一切的。

傻妞 2008-9-2 14:50

咱看不懂。。。。。就觉得人噶能写出来就是本事！顶楼主哈

四宝 2008-9-2 15:02

从小读的那些古书和古诗词看来对你的熏陶蛮大的！继续努力！:-79

灼灼其华 2008-10-7 08:14

写的很好，很欣赏，很敬仰，希望今后能相互交流。

大黄蜂 2008-10-10 10:27

此诗写的不错，我的诗文很幼稚，请易水先生指点一下，要读哪些书，才能提高。
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